Brain is Musty...: Ficlet O'Clock Truth or Dare

[scribblemyname]

This entry is part 35 of 35 in the series 365 Challenge

The current prompts are leaving me dull and uninspired. Seeking creative procrastination: ask me any question about how something works in a storyworld, a why that's been pestering you, or any backstory you just really want to know, and I'll commentfic it.

If that doesn't inspire you, how about a character (original or fandom) and something crazy you would dare them to do.

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Re: To Dance with a Dragon [2/2], Redux

[pygmymuse.livejournal.com]

Sometimes we can't help the stories that come out. Some just refuse to be ignored even if they're not the ones we want to write or even that we should write. *sigh*


Oh. I don't think I quite got that there were more to the dreams than just... that. I realize that Etienne said something to that effect, but it just didn't stick out enough to me (I'd suggest a short flashback with one of the couples where one remembers a dream that's not explicit for the sake of clarity there, and it could go a long way toward helping understanding of the bond, too, maybe.)

I don't remember getting the sense that sixteen was maturity before the first version of To Dance, and so mixing it with the Rothnen dreams was... unsettling. (Jhemet's wanting Etienne the man to notice her made me uncomfortable, but then I didn't get until this one that he wasn't that much older than her.) If I'd read Akena's piece first, I might not have reacted the same way. She was different. She called herself a little girl, but she didn't act like one, which is my usual trouble with stories about teenagers: they lack the maturity to handle the situations they've been put in (or just every day life, depending on the author.)

Re: To Dance with a Dragon [2/2], Redux

[scribblemyname]

You see. This is why I wish I ran my commentfic through betas. I think I've covered all the huge gamut of implications brought up and miss some. :shakes head at self: Will clarify some things before posting these on my site.

Thanks for pointing these items out.You're right. They make a difference.

Story order makes such a difference too. I think that's why I stuck Gone Hunting at the end of the three and chose reverse chronological order, but I never thought of putting someone like Akena first. Making notes for when I really start pulling together this world big time.

And that's why I rewrote Jhemet's little piece. 1. I had written it too much like fanfic, not explaining everything. 2. I had written it from the outsider perspective and I needed the insider, so had to switch POV. Etienne's hesitance was best explained by Etienne.

Re: To Dance with a Dragon [2/2], Redux

[pygmymuse.livejournal.com]

Well, I think even with betas we miss things. It goes back to everyone being different and coming in with different perspectives. Other readers will point out things me and my betas never saw.

You're welcome.

Akena does a lot to give insight not just into what it is to be a dragon but also to how one reaches maturity in Vardin, at least for me. She was important to understanding a lot of the world.

I had meant to tell you that I appreciated the historical details you'd worked into Etienne's version of the scene.